Thursday, August 19, 2021
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Hi Tama - it's wonderful to see you are blogging from home. You have added some great language to your writing to describe how the racers were feeling. Are motorbikes something you are interested in? I really enjoyed the ending where the yellow racer finished the race off with a jump! Wow! Next time, remember to add punctuation to your writing. Keep up the fabulous home learning. Jen
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ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing with us your story. It is amazing to see you are still proactive at home. I feel bad for Charles because he could not win the race and was also terribly hurt. I was wondering what happened to Charles in the end. Was he okay?
I also like the use of photos to illustrate your story, which makes your post more attractive to readers.
Keep up the good work Tama! Stay safe and I hope to see you back to school soon.
Miss Helen Le
Hi Tama. I enjoyed reading your story about the race. I like how you started the story using the word "excited" to describe the racers. Getting ready for any race is always exciting, although I always feel a bit nervous too. Next time remember to add some punctuation, as this makes it easier for the reader to read your writing. Keep up the great work. Carol (TA)
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