Police Arrested Goldilocks
On Monday 31st 11.00am, there was sunshine and it was a very beautiful day in the river forest. The three bears went out and went for a walk around the forest then they went for a swim but the baby bear just wanted to stay out of the water because he would drown and he can't swim yet.
Then when they got home everything was touched and moved around but they went to their porridge and that got eaten too but not mama or papa bears one. This was because they were too hot and soft then baby bears porridge was alone so they went to the chairs so they could sit down but baby bear couldn't sit down because his chair was gone someone stole baby bears chair.
Mama bear said,”let's go to sleep’’ then when we wake up we will ring the police so they went upstairs and went to their beds but someone has been sleeping in my bed said mama and daddy bear then baby bear went to his bed and he said there is someone in my bed.
Daddy bear wanted to hit Goldilocks for breaking in there house but instead he got on the phone to the police so they could come and arrest Goldilocks for breaking in someone's house. She also would be arrested for breaking the law, but before daddy bear got to the phone Goldilocks had it and ran off with it all of the three bears tried to get it but it was too late. She was in the house somewhere. So they looked everywhere but they couldn't find her.
Then once they got the phone he called the police and the police put her in jail for breaking in the bears house and stealing baby bears clothes and chairs then when they put her in jail her mother was not happy at all then the bears lived happily ever after.
Then she kept thinking of what she did and then she was writing for how much days she was in jail one month later she stopped writing how much days she been there then 1 day later she got out then she said i was only there for 1 month and 1 day then the security guard said you were ment to be there for 1 full year. Then she did a big runner then another security guard got her then said you're in there for 1 year and three months then she was really sad.
Very good, Tama I like how you told us where and when the scene happens this is a very good police report.
ReplyDeleteKIA Ora Good job Tama you did a lot of writing i also like how you put a picture at the end. blog you later.
ReplyDeleteHi Tama I'm Reuben from Rawhiti school I liked how you used lots of describing words. Reminds me of a story that I have read. Maybe next time you could read it through to make sure it has capital letters.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Tama I'm Leon from Rawhiti School. I really like your story because you got lots of describing words. Why did you chose to do this? I like the way you put your work in paragraphs, I find it hard to do?
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